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 Posted: Wed, 30th May 2012 12:21 Post subject: A poem i wrote |
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The wound upon her chest was like a ribbon of fear. As she walked through the crowd she felt the stares peering into her.
She wanted to hide; she wanted to move into shadow so she could catch her breath. The horrors are closing in now, the gazes penetrating her soul.
But then she saw him. He, whose stare wasn’t like a needle upon her heart but like a flow of energy filling her soul. As she neared him, the shadows seemed to vanish, the horrors fled and for a moment it was if they never existed at all. Who is this person she wounders, where did he come from?
He moved through the crowd, his heart beating faster and faster. In his mind he wished they all could disappear. He couldn’t stand it; he couldn’t open his mouth and converse like everyone else. He felt fear gripping his heart, the crowd filled with monsters that wanted to cling onto him and feed of his terror.
But then he saw her. She, who didn’t mind how he spoke. She whose face was like a warm summer wind blowing away the fear like dandelion petals.
Who is this person he wounders, where did she come from?
As they both stand there, looking at each other they take that first step into what can either be heaven or a pit of darkness. The next step is yet to come…
Please give some feedback, tell me if it sucks or if you like it. Or if I should just fuck her in teh butt.
Dont mess with God, he can impregnate your girlfriend/wife without taking his pants off!
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vaifan1986
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| Posted: Wed, 30th May 2012 13:16 Post subject: |
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I kept waiting for the guy to start sparkling.
Maybe the next chapter.
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fisk
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| Posted: Wed, 30th May 2012 13:37 Post subject: |
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Any girlfriend would tell you it was awesome...
Yes, yes I'm back.
Somewhat.
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 12:32 Post subject: |
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Come on guys, dont be shy. Please give me more feedback...
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vaifan1986
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Neon
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 12:58 Post subject: |
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Mirra's men had caught me. Their black van took me out of the city. The countryside was sickeningly pretty: The sun setting on a sweet summer day, rain sparkling on grass, birds in the trees, children playing. The Pink Bird Mental Institute. Mirra's men pretended to be hospital wardens.
The flesh. The flesh. I think I died. I think I'm dead. I don't know. I don't know. Death is coming. It's coming. They're here. They're here. Get away. Get away. I'm gonna hurt you. I'm gonna hurt you.
They said I was an escaped mental patient.
"Paranoid Schizophrenic. You are insane, psychotic. You have to eat plenty of pills to get better."
They lied that I had killed my girlfriend. John Mirra came to mock me in the bathroom mirror.
The flamingo was with him.
".mirrorS arE morE fuN thaN televisioN"
Mirra claimed my girlfriend had turned evil, joined him.
".shE haS dyeD heR haiR reD"
I smashed the mirror. I'd kill them all.
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 13:15 Post subject: |
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| Neon wrote: | Mirra's men had caught me. Their black van took me out of the city. The countryside was sickeningly pretty: The sun setting on a sweet summer day, rain sparkling on grass, birds in the trees, children playing. The Pink Bird Mental Institute. Mirra's men pretended to be hospital wardens.
The flesh. The flesh. I think I died. I think I'm dead. I don't know. I don't know. Death is coming. It's coming. They're here. They're here. Get away. Get away. I'm gonna hurt you. I'm gonna hurt you.
They said I was an escaped mental patient.
"Paranoid Schizophrenic. You are insane, psychotic. You have to eat plenty of pills to get better."
They lied that I had killed my girlfriend. John Mirra came to mock me in the bathroom mirror.
The flamingo was with him.
".mirrorS arE morE fuN thaN televisioN"
Mirra claimed my girlfriend had turned evil, joined him.
".shE haS dyeD heR haiR reD"
I smashed the mirror. I'd kill them all. |
I liked it, loved the rhyme. Did you write it?
Dont mess with God, he can impregnate your girlfriend/wife without taking his pants off!
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garus
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 14:06 Post subject: |
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Neon
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ixigia
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 16:10 Post subject: |
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I don't know about your partner, but this poem makes me want to fyitb Acer 
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Ankh
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| Posted: Thu, 31st May 2012 16:49 Post subject: |
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Reminds me of Kings Bounty somehow...
shitloads of new stuff in my pc. Cant keep track of it all.
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